The Master lowered his weapon and looked into Ben’s faded blue eyes. It had been necessary to return to the swamps and enter the tree cave. Many times he had waited without while others fled or fought.
He sagged. “I know not.”
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The Master lowered his weapon and looked into Ben’s faded blue eyes. It had been necessary to return to the swamps and enter the tree cave. Many times he had waited without while others fled or fought.
He sagged. “I know not.”
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Ha… short and sweet…
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42 words exactly. That’s what makes it a gargleblaster. 🙂 (even if I did reference some other unrelated sci-fi scene.)
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yeah… maybe a little you did
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What? No.
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yeah
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nuh-uh.
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pretty much
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I don’t know what you’re talking about.
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okay… with the new pic that is really funny
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I did a little editing, too. It seemed a bit too vague.
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I like vague
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I do, too.
*sigh*
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oh yeah
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I like the wording of the last line. … sounds more eloquent than “I dunno.” 🙂
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He always talks that way. It’s his trademark.
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Many a times we find ourselves in the same situation,not really able to put a finger on the exact reason of our emotions,our battles and so much more-sigh!Good one!
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Thank you!
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🙂
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Nice job. I didn’t catch the Ben reference the first time. That’s one of the things I like about these, that they are so short you can read them over and over.
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I am just so glad that SOMEBODY caught that! 😀
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uh… you vagued it up a little…
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Really? Oh, well. Fuck it.
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That’s the spirit!
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Well, I thought the title was a dead give away. (Wrong!) I thought there were several things in the piece itself to point the way. (Wrong!) I thought the tags made it abundantly clear. (Wrong!) I almost put a picture of the cave at top, but I decided that would be like cheating. (I already thought the tags and changed avatar made me a cheater; I don’t know why I was unwilling to go “there”.) I’m sure as hell not going to add a sentence at the bottom saying: “This is a reference to____ ____.” No. Nope. Not doing it.
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Don’t write down to your audience
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Is that what I did?
Seriously. Lay it on me.
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No… that was me being clever, not you not being clever…
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Oi!
I was all ready for a life lesson there.
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from me>???
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I KNOW.
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ha
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but if you come here after everyone else has like me…you get the reference. 😉
although even without it, it’s a compelling piece. “I know not” is poetic and phrased to make you think about it’s structure.
in any case, do any of us really know (at the end of our longest and bloodiest battles) what we are fighting for? By then it’s simply a matter of survival and tenacity.
a good write, a very good write.
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“but if you come here after everyone else has like me…you get the reference.”
HAHAHAHA! Good point. Oh, I r silly sometimes. I’d make a blushing emoticon, but I don’t remember how.
Anyway, I am glad you liked it. I think sometimes it can seem so clear why you’re fighting, when passions are high and adrenalin is pumping. But then, when your energy is spent, you step back and things are no longer cut and dried for you.
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I agree. In the thick of things the answers seems so clear and evident..it’s reminiscent of “be careful what you wish for…”
the wishes come true are not always a dream. 😉
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I totally loved your choice of words at the end there. This is a great piece no matter which way you look at it.
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Thank you!
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Ha! I got the reference from the title. But that’s the kind of geek I am. 🙂 Clever little piece. I like how one little phrase (“He sagged.”) conveys a whole host of emotions, making the story feel much larger. Great job, and thanks for linking up!
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Thanks, Christine! As always, I had great fun with it.
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By the way, “He sagged.” was a late edit, and I personally thought it made the whole piece. I’m grateful it stood out for you.
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I enjoyed your language in this piece. And like Christine, I loved the “he sagged” line. Karen
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Thank you, Karen. 🙂
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Love the rhyme at the end; makes it all the more powerful.
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Thank you. 🙂
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Grinning from ear to ear. 😀
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Aw, see now, THAT makes me happy. 😀
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Hooray!
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I like that you begin with the Master lowering his weapon, which to me feels like kind of a sagging gesture, and complete the piece with him more explicitly sagging physically and word-ily (I’m sure there’s a real word for that, but I’m tired. Oh. Verbally. Duh.) I get a real sense of defeat from him. Nicely done!
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Thank you, Kay. 🙂
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